How Rewriting an Indie Film Made Me a Better Screenwriter

Bob Messinger - Pyragraph

Bob Messinger is the writer and producer of It Ain’t No Sin, which is currently being crowdfunded on Seed&Spark.

This year’s Golden Globes signaled a noteworthy shift in American cinema, with the independent films Boyhood and Birdman taking home the most honors.

After the awards show, my wife remarked, “I loved those two films, but they didn’t seem like indies to me.”

I rewrote the crow scenes to be shot from the bird’s point of view.

I understood immediately what she meant. She and I have made it a point to attend countless regional, independent film festivals over the years, and the films we’ve seen and enjoyed have been markedly different from Boyhood or Birdman in that most have been made on shoestring and low budgets.

On the other hand, according to IMDb Pro, Boyhood was made for about $4 million and Birdman for about $18 million—not high by Hollywood studio standards, but definitely not within the budget constraints of the indies my wife and I have come to love, and certainly not within the budget limitations of the filmmakers with whom I associate. For example, my current feature, presently in the crowdfunding and pre-production stages, has a modest budget of $45,000.

Bob Messinger - Pyragraph

What Is a True Indie?

To me, a true indie is one that:

  1. Is not produced by a Hollywood studio.
  2. Doesn’t adhere to the rigid structures demanded by studio execs.
  3. Looks at the world somewhat differently than those made by Hollywood.
  4. Is produced way below the cost of Hollywood blockbusters.

I suppose Boyhood and Birdman do adhere to all four of my criteria, as their budgets were still lower than most studio projects. Perhaps my definition of what constitutes an indie film has to be broadened. Perhaps criteria #4 has to be broken into two tiers.The first tier would be comprised of those with access to funds that allow them to spend several million on their projects. The second tier would include filmmakers who produce their work on ultra-low to low budgets.

I belong to the shoestring-budget group. I am in the process of converting from screenwriter to filmmaker for the simple reason that I want to see my work produced. I’ve been writing for years, and although I have various screenwriting awards under my belt, I am just one of hundreds of thousands other writers with scripts floating around Hollywood. At any given time, there are an estimated 500,000 spec scripts circulating within the industry.

I think when most screenwriters begin writing, they dream of penning that big Hollywood blockbuster. I know I did, and my earlier scripts certainly reflected that dream. Budget be damned!

Obviously, when I realized that Hollywood wasn’t necessarily going to be knocking down my door for its next blockbuster, I had to completely rethink how I write in order to produce my own projects. And in doing that, I have become a much better writer.

The C.O. - Pyragraph

My rework of The C.O. for lower-budget indie production took the top prize at the prestigious ENDAS International Screenplay Competition in Europe.

The Rewrite Process

The first thing I did was to select two of my scripts for rewrites. Both met my first three criteria for independent films, but both were written with multi-million dollar budgets in mind.

I read them both, and I came up with of list of things I would need to do to make the stories more affordable so that they could be made independently:

  1. Eliminate all scenes that did not advance the stories. This is just good storytelling. How many films have we endured that seemed to go on and on? Even a few of this year’s Oscar nominees could have been cut by 15 minutes or so. I was truly surprised at how much I was able to cut without losing anything and how much better the story flowed.
  2. Eliminate all characters who were not critical to the stories. This was perhaps the most difficult, because I felt as though I were killing off people I’d come to know and love (writers tend to become deeply involved with the characters we create). I did lose some great backstory and interactions with the main characters, but in the end, it forced me to better focus on and better build my primary characters.
  3. Tighten my dialogue. Way back when I first started writing, my dialogue truly rambled. I’d thought I’d overcome my tendency to overwrite dialogue—and then I did these two rewrites! The revised dialogue not only moves the stories along at a better pace, but it also sounds much more realistic.
  4. Find ways to work around expensive production scenes. Some scenes are just too important to lose, and though the films probably would have more visual impact as originally written, I knew my budget just wouldn’t allow for the necessary crowds and pyrotechnics. Fortunately, modern post-production technologies make it easy and cost effective to create the illusion of these scenes. In my rewrites, I consulted with editors to find ways of making these scenes work with fairly simple after effects. I am happy with the rewrites because I believe they will better focus on the reactions and emotions of the characters involved.
  5. Rewrite animal actor scenes. I love animals. They play a big part of my daily life, and as such, I tend to include them in my stories. But I’ve learned that animal actors are super expensive, and as one animal agent told me, “There’s no such thing as a pity rate for low-budget films.” My subsequent research proved this to be true. But an animal, specifically a crow, plays an integral part in one of the films I want to produce. So I rewrote the crow scenes to be shot from the bird’s point of view. And guess what? Doing so gives the story a much better perspective. The crow plays a pivotal role in the protagonist’s arc, and seeing the action through the bird’s eyes will give the audience a much better feel of her agony and motivation. And I won’t have to hire a crow at a cost that would be about half of my production budget!

Now, on to the next step!

I truly believe that rewriting these two scripts for production as low-budget indies has made me a much better writer, and I fully expect those writing skills to follow me in my future projects.

But for now, I am focused on funding and executing the production of one of my rewrites, It Ain’t No Sin. Check it out!

It Ain't No Sin - Pyragraph

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  1. […] Check out my screenwriting rewrite article published in conjunction with Seed&Spark yesterday in Pyragraph, the online career & lifestyle magazine for artists, musicians, designers, filmmakers, writers and other creatives. http://www.pyragraph.com/2015/01/how-rewriting-an-indie-made-me-a-better-writer/ […]

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